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Poem. What do you think of it? What do you think it's about?
I wrote a poem and I want to know if you can understand it and if it's very good. I will tell you what it's about at the end.
The air is war
The sky is bright
A beautiful red fills the sky
The wonderful light flashes.
Then comes the rain
It cascades down from the heavens
In heavy black drops
Painting the ground.
The buildings melt
On this hot, hot day
The sun lights up
All the trees and flowers.
The creatures crawl across the ground
Seeking refuge in the shade
Heading to the water
To cool down.
But the day goes on
And the city is silenced
Deserted and bare
The creatures are gone
Glowing embers cover the ground
No one is there to see.
The first line is meant to say "The air is warm".
Sorry 
Is it about pollution and environmental destruction? I do like the imagery.
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Go Light Your World - Cascade - Christmas Eve 2009
Does this sound good???
My eyes grazed the horizon line. They traveled down onto the yellow waves that cascaded towards the shoreline like the winding lives of a determined thespian. My heart captivated by the cool friction that the sand left between my toes. My will carried me towards the lapping water at the shores. I waded in until the cold reached mid-calf. My sweatshirt billowed with the early wind. I let my head fall back as I savored the salty sweetness of the sea for the last time. My eyes closed as I got lost in the moment, my mind flooded with the memories of childhood days.
Splashes of orange and bronze played against the thin lids covering my eyes. I opened them to face the sunrise. I drank in the light. My left hand clasped tightly on my farewell note, folded into a tight square, my right pulling the fabric of my shirt close to myself.
Its the book im writing. Sorry about the category... stupid automatic sorter.
The first paragraph is horrible. You use 'I' and 'me' way too much. It's also too wordy. The second paragraph is great.
